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Unit 5

Letter of Thanks

Unit 5

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Letter of Thanks2

Writing Practice3

Main Sentence Problems 31

Main Sentence Problems (3)

Confusing Shifts（转换混乱）

Choppy Sentences （断续句）

Confusing Shifts

Writers should keep the elements in a sentence consistent, avoiding any unnecessary changes in tense, voice, mood, person, number, and discourse.  Such unnecessary changes, or "shifts," may make reading difficult and obscure the sentence's  meaning for the reader.

Confusing Shifts

1. Confusing Shifts in Person

2. Confusing Shifts in Tense

3. Confusing Shifts in Subject & Voice

4. Confusing Shifts in Mood or Speech

5. Confusing Shifts in Number

6. Mixed Sentence Construction

e.g.:

(How to improve it?)

(1) If all we do in life is complaint, then one shouldn’t be surprised if no one likes you.

(Correction)

(1) If all we do in life is complaint, then we shouldn’t be surprised if no one likes us.

(2) If all you do in life is complaint, then you shouldn’t be surprised if no one likes you.

(3) If all he does in life is complaint, then he shouldn’t be surprised if no one likes him.

Study the following two sentences:

(1) A driver should never race your motor without a warm-up.

(2) When I was in high school, you never knew what to expect.

They should be corrected in the same person:

(1) A driver should never race his motor without a warm-up.

(2) When I was in high school, I never know what to expected.

Point out the problems with in sentences and revise them.

(1)When one is sick, you don’t want company.

A: When you are sick, you don’t want company.

B: When one is sick, one doesn’t want company.

C: When one is sick, he doesn’t want company.

(2) The photographer was changing film when the building shudders and collapses.

The photographer was changing film when the building shuddered and collapsed.

(3) I was extremely sorry you are injured. I am extremely sorry you are injured.

(4) Mike cannot keep orchids(兰花 ) alive, but geraniums （天竺葵） are easy for him to grow.

Mike cannot keep orchids alive, but he finds it easy to grow geraniums.

(5) Shirley won the first prize, while her brother was awarded the second.

Shirley won the first prize, while her brother got the second.

(6) Roger crossed the goal line, and the winning touch-down(触地得分 ) was scored.

Roger crossed the goal line, and scored the winning goal.

(7) First stop the noise and then you may start the discussion.

First stop the noise and then start the discussion.

(8) Mandy told to me get out of here.

A: Mandy said to Tom, “Get out of here!”

B: Mandy told Tome to get out of there.

C: Mandy told Tom that he should get out of there.

(9) If state parks become too commercialized, they will no longer be a place to escape the pressure of city life.

If state parks become too commercialized, they will no longer be places to escape the pressure of city life.

(10) In high school we worked more as a group than as an individual.

In high school we worked more as groups than as individuals.

(11) His job was a policeman.

A: He was a policeman.

B: He worked as a policeman.

(12) Since he was coming was the reason for our excitement.

A: Since he was coming we were excited.

B: His coming was the reason for our excitement.

Ex1. Revised the sentences to get rid of the confusing shift

1 ） When any one shows up, they tell you to come right in.

2) After I arrived, they asked everybody to take your seat.

3)The lightning flashes, the great oak splits like a parting curtain, and the two halves fell into either side.

4) The lion sprang upon its quarry, and the antelope was killed.

5)The faculty here seem more like a friend than like teachers.

Ex1. Revised the sentences to get rid of the confusing shift

6) I was shocked when Greg told her get lost.

7) The firm wanted to know would she consider their offer.

8 ） Above all else, we love his paintings of flowering roses, a work of genius.

9) He wrote “The End ” with a flourish, then his book is finished.

10) Just because the price is low is not enough to prove that it was stolen.

Choppy Sentences(断续句 )

-- Choppy sentences are successive sentences that are too short. Although simple sentences are quite effective sometimes, overuse them in a succession may produce a halty, jerky effect and obstruct the flow of a simple idea.

Choppy Sentences

e.g.:

1) There was a knock at the door. I asked. Nobody answered.

2) He found the kitchen window open. He put a ladder against the window. He climbed in.

How to Improve Choppy Sentences

--- The way to improve it is to join the short sentences into one compound or complex sentence by using appropriate transitional words, or to change some sentences into phrases attached to some other sentences.

1) There was a knock at the door. I asked. Nobody answered.

2) He found the kitchen window open. He put a ladder against the window. He climbed in.

可改为：1) There was a knock at the door. I asked

who it was, but got no answer.2) Finding the kitchen window open, he

put a ladder against it and climbed in.

Ex 2. Improving the following choppy sentences by combing them to make either compound or complex, or simple sentences with phrasal modifiers.

1) Gasoline is becoming expensive. Automobile manufacturers are producing smaller cars. Smaller cars use less gasoline.

2) The computer has undoubtedly benefited humanity. The computer has also created problems for humanity.

3) Government and private agencies have spent billions of dollars advertising the dangers of smoking. The number of smokers is still increasing.

4) Some students go to college to get a degree. Some students go to college to get an education.

5)The grading system at our college should be abolished. The students don’t like getting grades. The instructors don’t enjoy giving grades.

Letter of Thanks

IntroductionContents of Letter of ThanksSample Letters of ThanksUseful ExpressionsPoints in Writing Letters of Thanks

Introduction of Letter of Thanks

Letter of thanks is a formal and polite way to express one’s appreciation. Though a phone call or face-to-face oral expression can transmit your thanks, letter of thanks can show your attention to the help or gift from others.

According to the situations it concerns, letter of thanks can be classified into two types, letter of thanks for the help or gifts from others and letter of thanks for a job interview one has just experienced.

Contents of Letter of Thanks (for the help or gifts from others )

Express your thanks for the help or gift you received. Thank you for the book you gave me for my birthday. Specify the importance of the help or gift. You know I have been interested in backpacking since our scout troop went

on its first camping trip when I was 10 years old. Now that I plan to spend a week backpacking during spring holidays, this book will be really great for me to have.

Mention your present situation relevant to the help or gift. I am getting along quite well with my new job though it is very demanding.

Thanks again for the help or gift. Again thank you for the book you sent me. I will read it with care as I

prepare for my backpacking trip. Thank you for thinking of me on my birthday.

A Sample Letter of Thanks

Dear Aunt Sharon Rose, Thank you so much for the CD you sent me for Christmas. I hope

Uncle Mike and Aunt Pam are well. Maybe next Christmas when I go to my father's for the holiday you could come down and visit us. I haven't seen you since we were waiting in the Cincinnati Airport for a connection flight to England, which was nearly two years ago!

It reminds me that we should stay in contact and make the effort to see one another more often. It's too bad that the only time we call on one another is on holiday and sometimes not even then; after all, we are family. I was really thrilled about the Chemical Brothers' CD. It is a really great album.

I had to work at Christmas and when Dad called I told him and he was all shocked and appalled. I guess he never had to work on holiday.

I just wanted to thank you for thinking of me. I know that you are a busy person and I really appreciate your taking time to look for a CD for me.

Love, Amanda

Contents of Letter of Thanks (for a job interview )

Letter of thanks for a job interview is the one written during the job application. It should be sent immediately after the job interview you’ve just experienced. The true purpose of this letter of thanks is to restate your advantages and working experience. It is an important process in job application.

Letter of thanks for a job interview includes the following contents:

Contents of Letter of Thanks (for a job interview )

Mention again the position you are applying for. It was very enjoyable to speak with you about the assistant

account executive position at the Green Agency. The job seems to be a very good match for my skills and interests.

Re-express your interest in the post and emphasize your advantages and skills so that this letter be a self –recommendation after the interview.

In addition to my enthusiasm, I will bring to the position strong writing skills, assertiveness and the ability to encourage others to work cooperatively with the department. My artistic background will help me to work with artists on staff and provide me with an understanding of the visual aspects of our work.

Contents of Letter of Thanks (for a job interview )

Add the points that might be ignored by the personnel officers.

I understand your need for administrative support. My detail orientation and organizational skills will help to free you to deal with larger issues. I neglected to mention during my interview that I had worked for two summers as a temporary office worker. This experience helped me to develop my secretarial and clerical skills.

Thanks again for the interviewers’ time and consideration and provide contact information.

I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I am very interested in working for you and look forward to hearing from you about this position. I can be reached at home in the evening as well as at my office during the day.

A Sample Letter of Thanks for Job Interview 3420 　 Big 　 Tree 　

Lane DeLand, 　 FL 32720 386-555-0345

June 24,2000 Ms. Angela Chastain

Director of Human Resources Modern Advertising, Inc 345 Center Drive Centertown, PA 55555

Dear Ms. Chastain: Thank you for meeting with me last Thursday, August 8, to discuss

the position of copywriter at Modern Advertising, Inc. I was quite impressed with the enthusiasm you displayed for your company's future and the helpfulness of your office personnel. Learning about Modern's present media campaign for the Pennsylvania Sausage Company was exciting. Modern Advertising is a company with which I would like to be associated.

Your description of the special qualifications needed for this position was especially interesting. My ability to work under pressure and meet tight deadlines has already been proven in the advertising position I held with the Slippery Rock Rocket. As I stated at our meeting, I enjoyed the challenge of a competitive environment in which success is based on achievement.

I would also like to mention that since our meeting I have received the College Reporter's Award for an article of mine published in the Rocket. This is my first national award, and I am quite encouraged by this approval of my work.

Again, thank you for considering me for the position of copywriter. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

Rebecca Leddyfern

Useful Expressions

I’m writing to express my gratitude for your help…I’m most/extremely grateful to you for your warm

hospitality during our visit in Beijing.It was enjoyable to speak with you about …Permit me to thank you for the invitation to your

institute and generous kindness extended to us. I enjoyed the opportunity to meet with you.Your help is much appreciated by each of us.My true gratitude is beyond any word’s description.I would like to extend my sincere gratitude for…Thank you again from the bottom of my heart.

Useful Expressions

Thank you very much!Many thanks for…Please accept my sincere / grateful appreciation for... I would like to take this opportunity to express my

great appreciation for your timely help and assistance.I sincerely / deeply / warmly appreciate…I am sincerely grateful to you for…It was good / fine / nice of you… 承蒙好意……I would like to thank you for…I was deeply touched by…We are indebted to you… 我们

Points in Writing Letters of Thanks

Be friendly and sincere in tone when writing letter of thanks.

Use superlative or exaggerating words to express your thanks and appreciation.

Write and send a letter of thanks immediately after you receive a gift or help or after you experience a job interview.

Writing Practice

Write a letter of thanks to someone who

A. has offered you help or sent you a gift;

B. has interviewed you.

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