B 老师写作范文合集

Task 2 题目：Today there is a great increase in anti-social behaviors and lack of

respect to others. What are the causes of this? Who should take responsibility for

dealing with it? (选自 2011 年 01 月 22 日雅思写作机经)

With the development of modern society, there seems to be an irresistible

uprising momentum of anti-social behaviors and lacking in respect between people.

Various causes may lead to this increasingly prevailing phenomenon. From my

personal perspectives, I tend to attribute this tendency to the morbid social conduct,

the gap between the rich and the poor and the fiasco of school education.

开头三排比提出自己的观点：病态的社会风气、贫富差距、学校教育的失败是原因，直接

定义为五段论的基调，坚持五段论，高分作文最起码的结构！！！

The surroundings somewhat influence the behaviors of people due to the

conformity mentality among us. A healthy social conduct will guide people, on the

contrary, an unhealthy society can destroy the very good nature of people. Take an

example of the terrorist attack in Norway 2011, which caused 77 innocent civilians’

lives. If there were a more harmonious social conduct to give more sense of belonging

to that pervert killer, the tragedy could be prevented.

无比贴切的例子的使用，挪威变态杀手的恐怖袭击，完全西方化的思维。

The widening gap between the wealthy and the poor also triggered the

psychology of hatred of those so-called “borderline men”. The enlarging social

stratification and the growing income gap between the white-collars and manual

workers stir the mental imbalance as well as the call on unfairness among the people

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with humble birth. Spontaneously, the rich became more and more disrespectful to

the poor which eventually awakened the wrath of them.

关键词乃“社会边缘人”，围绕这个中心词展开，究其原因乃贫富差距之大之可憎！！！

The school education is the last to be condemned. Were there more skillful and

patient guidance of how to cultivate a complete and sound personality, to some

extent, there won’t be that many extremists and borderline people .The formation of

individual’s property and character molded during juvenile years, especially,

adolescence, which, if slightly twisted, could affect a person’s later on life pattern

and personality. That’s where a good or bad education makes difference.

谴责学习教育，没有注重培养学生健全人格！！

In summary, if only we could generate a healthier social conduct, if only the gap

between the rich and the poor could be narrowed, if only the quality of school

education could be bettered, the anti-social behaviors will be eliminated greatly and

the society of mutual-respect will rise up again.

结尾相应再次三排比，连续 if only 的使用，好比在写一首动人的诗歌！！

词汇句型

与 话 题 相

关的词汇、

词组

Modern society

当代社会

Social conduct

社会风气

Social status

School education

学校教育

Extremist

极端主义者

Borderline man/person

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社会地位

Disrespectful to…

对..不尊重的

社会边缘人物

高分词汇、

词组

Twisted

扭曲的

Morbid

病态的

Fiasco

大失败

Trigger

扣动扳机，激发

Stir

激起，唤起

Condemn

谴责

Juvenile years

青少年时代

Adolescence

青春期

Mutual-respect

The psychology of hatred

仇富心理

social stratification

社会分层（乃高阶社会学单词）

Manual worker

体力劳动者

Mental imbalance

心理不平衡

Humble birth

出生贫寒的，地位粗鄙的

Complete and sound personality

完整健全的人格

Mould(英) Mold(美)

用模子做，陶冶，形成

The widening gap

日益拉大的趋势

an irresistible momentum

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互相尊重

Conformity mentality

从众心理

一种不可逆的趋势

An Increasingly prevailing

phenomenon

一个逐渐普遍的趋势

高分句型 1. With the development of modern society, there seems to

be an irresistible uprising momentum of anti-social

behaviors and lacking in respect between people.（一种不

可逆的上升趋势，开头就像轰炸机一下给你当头一棒，起评分就

定位在 7 分以上了）

2. A healthy social conduct will guide people, on the

contrary, an unhealthy society can destroy the very good

nature of people.（B 老师我名人名言一般的高度精炼语言组

织，这种语言出来基本肯定是 8+的分数了）

3. If there were a more harmonious social conduct to give

more sense of belonging to that pervert killer, the tragedy

could be prevented. （紧接着一句虚拟语气，继续轰炸你的阅

读神经）

4. The enlarging social stratification and the growing income

gap between the white-collars and manual workers stir

the mental imbalance as well as the call on unfairness

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among the people with humble birth.（不管是无比高大上的

social stratification 还是小词 stir 和 call on 的使用，都让这句

话看上去像是从哪本社会性书上抄的，所以考官看到这里已经在

8.5 和 9 分之间徘徊、犹豫了）

5. The formation of individual’s property and character

molded during juvenile years, especially, adolescence,

which, if slightly twisted, could affect a person’s later on

life pattern and personality.（连续的逗号使用，就是不出现句

号，再加上宾语从句，合情合理，句子结构清晰，考官终于忍不

住给 9 分了！！！）

TASK2：Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own

ideas in whichever way the wish (in words, pictures, music or film).There should

be no government restrictions on what they do.To what extent do you agree or

disagree this opinion?

In the modern society, creative ideas and thoughts from artists are more endorsed

by the public than before. Although it’s a seemingly positive trend that it somewhat

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triggered people’s aspiration and awareness of many aspects of lives, I still believe

that relevant regulations and restrictions should be put on such approach.

一句话引出大背景，然后用让步语气表明自己真正的观点

There is no denying that the creative artists could work as a lubrication when the

social disputes and frictions occurred by entertaining people in an artistic and

innovative manner, which, to some extent, will also start a new fashion trend or deliver

breakthroughs to the realm of art. But whether the changes they bring along to the

mass of folks and our society is positive or negative remained uncertain.

让步断，全段总共就两句话，提出观点“创意艺术家”不一定能给社会带来积极效应

Say if a random maniac artist starts doing behaviorism against the high medical

expense by persuading people to stop taking any treatments when get ill. This no

longer helping but misleading people. Some young minors, in which case , could be

their supporters without having any clue what exactly they are doing but simply

follow up. Until then, the interests of people and government will be endangered and

those minors will be the ones who hurt the most.

提出一个假设的例子，但是确实是社会中可能出现的，提出那些病态的艺术家可能带来的负

面影响

Moreover, the regulation and restriction should be set up to regulate those morbid

and negative art forms. If all the so-called artists are free to present their lunatic ideas,

there mainstream of the speech could somehow be affected, in the meantime, the

morality codes and social principle that built up by people for years could be

jeopardized.

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提出相应的解决措施

In summary, creative artists are always welcomed by people and society as long as

they are leading something positive and healthy under certain restrictions set by

government.

提出规划

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词汇句型

与话题相关的词

汇、词组

Artistic

艺术的

Behaviorism

行为艺术

art form

艺术形式

Mislead

误导

Regulation

规章

Restriction

限制

social dispute

社会矛盾

friction

摩擦，矛盾，不和

高分词汇、词组 Be endorsed by…

原意为：（支票，汇票）的背

书

这里指被…赞成

Be seemingly+adj

The mass of folks

大众

Maniac

疯狂的，癫狂的

Minor

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看上去像是…

Trigger one’s aspiration

引起了某人的灵感

Work as a lubrication

for…

作为…的润滑剂

Morality code

道德准则，准绳

年轻人，一般指青少年

Morbid

病态的

Lunatic

疯狂的，失去理智的

Be jeopardized

被毁坏，被颠覆

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高分句型 Although it’s a seemingly positive trend that it

somewhat triggered people’s aspiration and

awareness of many aspects of lives, I still believe that

relevant regulations and restrictions should be put on

such approach.

注意 seemingly 和 somewhat 这两个词都体现出了怀疑的

语气，大家要学会这种语气小词的巧用，最后跟上 I still

believe 明确了自己的偏向

There is no denying that the creative artists could work

as a lubrication when the social disputes and frictions

occurred by entertaining people in an artistic and

innovative manner, which, to some extent, will also

start a new fashion trend or deliver breakthroughs to

the realm of art.

经久不衰的“逗号战术”+好朋友“宾语从句”，无限续命

Say if a random maniac artist starts doing behaviorism

against the high medical expense by persuading

people to stop taking any treatments when get ill.

其实 Say 这种词都能引领整段，就是举例的意思，这样的开

头很顺应逻辑和很柔和，看的人很轻松

If all the so-called artists are free to present their

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lunatic ideas, there mainstream of the speech could

somehow be affected, in the meantime, the morality

codes and social principle that built up by people for

years could be jeopardized.

In the mean time 也可以起到出乎意料的续命效果，这要

你炼词造句的本领够强

In summary, creative artists are always welcomed by

people and society as long as they are leading

something positive and healthy under certain

restrictions set by government.

结尾大家也可以学习这种一句长句的结构，配合 as long as

显得浑然天成

Topic：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on

salaries for university professors.Use specific reasons and examples to support

your answer.

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Over the years, the drastic debate over whether if we should enhance the salaries of

university professors has never be eased. As a common phenomenon, all schools of

high learning are seeking a universal evaluation mechanism of their professors which

can eventually sort the real “pros” from the “outsiders”. As far as I am concerned,

to spend more money on their salaries could be one of the stimulus for those

professors but never the best manner to urge them to stay. A more optimized and

long-term rewarding system which should be carried out to retain the teaching staff is

manifested in the following statements.

平时写惯了雅思的短小精悍版开头，这次就给大家来给虎头吧！提出观点，加薪不是唯一有

效鼓励机制！

To begin with, the increased salary is not equal to a better academic performance of

those professors. Under the current circumstances, the professors in the college or

university are already the best paid ones among all the faculties. However, it doesn’t

mean that they are better academically or professionally than those docents and

lecturers. If we keep raising their salaries, especially those less qualified and sloopy

professors, regardless of the other hard working and devoted teachers, the

psychological imbalance will be prevailing in the campus. Until then, how are we

supposed to expect those real dedicated faculties give all their best and enthusiasm

to their works?

为了顺应考试潮流，文章果断采用中规中矩的总分结构三段论，分段第一段观点：教授工

资或与实力不成正比，引起公愤！

Moreover, the criteria of a good professor is compositive which can not only be

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evaluated by his salary but also his academic achievements and his influence among

students. Spontaneously, what a real professor needs is more than a handsome pay

but the sense of identification and belonging. If the university could help the

professors to achieve the ultimate fruit of academic research and build up a mutual

respect atmosphere for them, they will be definitely motivated and willing to

maximize their efforts to improve the quality of education

分段第二段观点：教授也有综合性需求，不单单是加薪

Last but not the least, the university should also pay attention to their financial

allocation, hence, to manage their budget rationally. It is not only the faculty pay but

also other aspects need the fund and financial support. For example, the laboratory

research, the sports arena and the students’ scholarship are all of high importance to

an elite university, which if under-evaluated, will surely cast a shadow on the overall

developments of such university and tip the balanced of a routine school life.

分段第三段观点：提出学习要合理分配资金，综合发展

To summary, the increased salary of professor could only contribute slightly to the

improvement of education. As for the radical leap of the pedagogy, university itself

should still consider how to mold the sense of responsibility and identity of those

professors.

结尾干净利落，在点一下开头和题目，还有全文观点。

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词汇句型

与话题相关的词

汇、词组

Teaching staff

师资力量，教育工作者

Academic performance

学术表现

Academic achievement

学术成就

Faculty

教（职）工

School of high learning

高等学校，学府

Docent

讲师,讲解员

Lecturer

（英美大学中的）讲师;演讲者

Laboratory research

实验室研究

Sports arena

体育馆

Students’ scholarship

学术奖学金

高分词汇、词组 Universal evaluation

mechanism

一个通用的评价机制

“pros” and “outsiders”

专家和门外汉

Sloppy

草率粗心的，马虎的，得过且过的

Devoted

全身心投入的，奉献的

Spontaneously

与此同时

Handsome pay

丰厚的收入

Ultimate fruit of…

最终的果实,终极成就

Cast a shadow on…

对..投下阴影

A routine school life

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Tip the balance of…

打破…的平衡

Sense of identification and

belonging

认同感和归属感

Sort A from B

把 A 和 B 区分开来

com-positive

综合的

mould(英),mold(美)

形成，养成，塑造

有规律的校园生活

Pedagogy

教育（学）

Radical leap

根本性的飞跃

Psychological

imbalance

心里不平衡

Be prevailing in…

在..普遍存在

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高分句型 Over the years, the drastic debate over whether if we

should enhance the salaries of university professors

has never be eased.

注意 has 表达的是 debate，而 over 之后的都是修饰，看

上去简单的一句句子却蕴藏着 B 老师我多年修行的功力

As a common phenomenon, all schools of high

learning are seeking a universal evaluation

mechanism of their professors which can eventually

sort the real “pros” from the “outsiders”.

这里要注意的是 universal 的真正意思是通用的意思，另外

sort…from..也是很 Native speaker 的表达

A more optimized and long-term rewarding system

which should be carried out to retain the teaching

staff is manifested in the following statements.

第一段就有那么多长难句，有点对不住大家，但是说白了这

些都不算是很迂腐的句子，大家要试着尝试模仿，这句话要

注意的是两个词 which 和 is，大家不要忘了主语是什么

If we keep raising their salaries, especially those less

qualified and sloopy professors, regardless of the

other hard working and devoted teachers, the

psychological imbalance will be prevailing in the

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campus.

又是 B 老师我百玩不厌的连续逗号的使用，逗开句子，使得

结构更清晰

If the university could help the professors to achieve

the ultimate fruit of academic research and build up a

mutual respect atmosphere for them, they will be

definitely motivated and willing to maximize their

efforts to improve the quality of education

这句话的句式很简单，但是就是一个字，够长！大家要学习

这种无限拉长句子又不显生硬的本领

For example, the laboratory research, the sports arena

and the students’ scholarship are all of high

importance to an elite university, which if

under-evaluated, will surely cast a shadow on the

overall developments of such university and tip the

balanced of a routine school life.

长句子停都停不下来，继续逗号和宾语从句结合混搭

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Task2: Some people say that to become a good teacher, you should acquire

enough training, while others say that teaching capabilities can be deceloped

with experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Teacher is one of the most important professions in our society. However, the

definition of a good teacher has long been a baffled question to people. Some regard

that the adequate teaching experience outweigh how much a teacher is properly

trained, while others hold the opposite views. From my point of view, I reckon that

both of these two qualities are what an excellent teacher should be made of.

一句话点出观点：这两种品质都必须的。

The training process of a good teacher is of vital importance and shouldn’t be

ignored. To be a qualified teacher, one should arm himself with sufficient knowledge

reserve that is related to the subjects he gives. Moreover, the pedagogic methodology

is also something that must be acquired by a quasi-teacher. It’s simply because the

students doesn’t merely need a teacher who only has profound knowledge but also

someone who is able to pass on those knowledge to them.

开头提出全段的观点，在成为真正的老师之前，那些准老师的培养也是很重要的。

Simultaneously, the practice is always based on the theory but sometimes

beyond theory. If the teacher only has a bunch of teaching methods but don’t have a

clue how to impart to the students, he won’t be a qualified teacher either. If there

was no teaching experience accumulated, a teacher would find it difficult to interact

with people and sometime, could even lost control of the whole class. Until then, no

matter how knowledgeable he is, students still won’t listen to him. Meanwhile, the

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teaching experience is also the symbol of confidence and authority of a good teacher,

which will definitely attracts many students and leave an impressive image on them.

同样的，开头提出中心论点，也就是实际经验基于理论又凌驾于理论。

To sum up, a good teacher should be someone who has both systematic training

and sufficient practical experience.

结尾言简意赅，合理控制篇幅，把精华留在中间两端

词汇句型

与话题相关的词

汇、词组

Qualified

合格的

Theory

理论

Method

方法

Authority

权威

Teaching experience

教学经验

Knowledge reserve

知识储备

Systematic training

系统性的训练

Profound knowledge

渊博的知识

高分词汇、词组 A baffled question

一个令人困惑的问题

Pedagogic methodology

教学法

Simultaneously

Impart to…

传授给…

Quasi-teacher

准老师

….of vital importance

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于此同时

Adequate teaching

experience

充足的教学经验

….具备很高的重要性

高分句型 From my point of view, I reckon that both of these

two qualities are what an excellent teacher should be

made of. 一个好老师必须具备的素质

It’s simply because the students doesn’t merely

need a teacher who only has profound knowledge

but also someone who is able to pass on those

knowledge to them. Not only…but also….的加强版

Simultaneously, the practice is always based on the

theory but sometimes beyond theory. 极度精炼的语

言

If there was no teaching experience accumulated, a

teacher would find it difficult to interact with people

and sometime, could even lost control of the whole

class. 虚拟语气

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Meanwhile, the teaching experience is also the

symbol of confidence and authority of a good

teacher, which will definitely attracts many students

and leave an impressive image on them. 宾语从句使

的句子拉长，结构清晰

Task 2: Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university

education. Some people think that universities should make higher education

easier for them to access. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the years, the halo of the university seemed never be really prevailing in the

rural areas. For the students lived in the countryside, who were suffered for years by

being called “The clumsy clodhopper”, the golden vault of university has never

been accessible to them. However, I reckon that it’s not only responsibility of those

schools of high learning but also the government to facilitate their paths to a better

education.

用比喻的方式引出大背景，然后提出自己的观点：不但是高等学府，政府也需要担当起给

乡村学生创造更好学习条件的重担

The very spirit of university is to provide an equal entrance opportunity to students

who meet the admission requirements. If the students in the rural high schools

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couldn’t arm themselves with the adequate and profound knowledge, they are surly

not welcomed to any university. Nevertheless, in the current context and condition,

it’s a paradox that no matter how hard they tried, many of them could still not

embrace the fruit of advanced knowledge due to certain aspects like a humble birth

and lower quality of pre-college learning.

提出大学教育的精神这个大点以及现实生活中乡村学生就算再努力也很难获得好的教育的

现状

In this case, the universities alone are not that helpful. The government and any

other social communities should cooperate with each other to aid those rural

students. Although it’s unfair to lower the qualification for them, some

counter-measures should be taken for the sake of a better pre-college learning which

could enable them to compete with the urban students in the same platform.

提出平等入学原则不能动摇，但是政府和地方机构必须有所作为帮助那些穷学生提高大学

学前教育的重要性

Moreover, for those qualified rural students but have problems to pay the tuition

fees, relevant compensations and scholarships should be carried out too by raising of

some sorts of “Brilliant humble student’s funds” in order to encourage them

financially and spiritually.

其他援助方式的提出

In conclusion, the university itself could carry some portion of this great endeavor

on its own shoulder. But the most part should be done by the government and social

communities.

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再次点题和自己的中心观点

词汇句型

与话题相关的词

汇、词组

School of high learning

高等学府

The spirit of university

大学精神

Admission

requirement

准入门槛

Pre-college learning

大学学前教育

Compensation

补助

Adequate and profound

knowledge

充足、渊博的知识

高分词汇、词组 halo

光晕，光环

be prevailing in

在…普遍、盛行

clumsy clodhopper

笨拙的乡巴佬

Paradox

矛盾，悖论

Aid

帮助，援助

arm oneself with…

the great endeavor

一个伟大的事业

embrace the fruit of …

怀抱…的成果

a humble birth

一个卑贱的出生，糟糕的生活状

态

carry…on one’s shoulder

自己担当起…

facilitate the path to…

使…的道路更容易

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用…武装自己

be accessible to…

对…可及

the golden vault of..

…的大门

高分句型 For the students lived in the countryside, who were

suffered for years by being called “The clumsy

clodhopper”, the golden vault of university has never

been accessible to them.

比喻修辞的优势显现，在第一段展现自己华丽的辞藻和长句

组织能力

Nevertheless, in the current context and condition,

it’s a paradox that no matter how hard they tried,

many of them could still not embrace the fruit of

advanced knowledge due to certain aspects like a

humble birth and lower quality of pre-college

learning.

几个关键的无缝衔接，it’s a paradox that, no matter

how, still, due to 逻辑关系先要理顺：矛盾的是…不管如

何…仍旧会..那是因为…

Although it’s unfair to lower the qualification for

them, some counter-measures should be taken for

the sake of a better pre-college learning which could

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enable them to compete with the urban students in

the same platform.

让步语气+宾语从句的搭配，注意 which 指代的是 better

pre-college learning

Moreover, for those qualified rural students but have

problems to pay the tuition fees, relevant

compensations and scholarships should be carried

out too by raising of some sorts of “Brilliant humble

student’s funds” in order to encourage them

financially and spiritually.

大家要培养一段话从头到尾是一句句子的能力

TASK 2：Environmental hazards are often too great for particular countries or

individuals to tackle. We have arrived at a point in time where the only way to

lessen environmental problems is at an international level. To what extent do you

agree or disagree?

Did you sense the speed of melting iceberg in the North Pole? Did you see the

tears of the children in Indonesian Tsunami? Did you feel the uprising temperature

around your feet? Those people suffered from the natural catastrophe are seeking

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help from the world as one. I think it’s time to unite the world and joint efforts to

solve the ecological deterioration because we alone are too weak to carry it on.

开头三排比，在强调语气的同时，定下全文广告式呼吁的基调，让给看管传统 paraphrase

开头的考官视觉上不一样的冲击

When the Indonesian Tsunami occurred, nobody was psychologically prepared

for the upcoming disaster which eventually wiped out the entire shore and even the

whole city. Thousands of local families lost their homes and land. For the survived

tourists, it’s a dreadful day which they will never try to recall. Thanks to the timely

international rescue that the rest of the breathing souls were able to escape from the

natural Diablo.

使用了“印度洋海啸”这个最贴切的例子，提出及时的国际救援的重要性

The world tight linked when heard the call from the screaming folks. But were

there more precautions taken world-widely, perhaps, there won’t be any woe and

misery prevailing on earth. This greeny lovely planet is the place we called home, our

manner towards which should be protective and respective. However, the thing that

mattered the most is an earthly collaboration and zeitgeist we share.

虚拟语气的使用，提出了全球范围内灾难预防的重要性和“时代精神”

If only any of those international communities tried a bit harder to propaganda a

better place for living by encouraging and guiding the people and countries, many of

the natural disasters wouldn’t happen. To be specify, all the nations should

cooperate and put the issues such as greenhouse gas elimination, El Niño, nuclear

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regulation and ect on the table, then relevant prevention of disasters could be carried

out too.

IF 引导的虚拟语气开头，提出环境保护宣传的重要性，之后引出一些热议环境问题，提

出国家机器在处理这里问题时起到的带头作用

Now we are all stand here, hand in hand, on the edge of living or death. I can’t

figure out a better time to work together because it’s now or never.

结尾又是广告台词一样的总结，但依然紧扣标题，突出合作的重要性

词汇句型

与话题相关的词

汇、词组

Melting iceberg

正在融化的冰山

North pole

北极

Indonesian Tsunami

印度洋海啸

Greenhouse gas

温室气体

El Niño

厄尔尼诺现象

Natural catastrophe

自然灾害

ecological deterioration

生态恶化

Nuclear regulation

核控制

高分词汇、词组 Joint efforts

合力

Wipe out

扫平

Breathing soul

幸存者

Natural diablo

大自然的魔鬼

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Dreadful

恐怖的，威慑的

Be prevailing on…

在…普遍存在

Greeny

绿（色）的

Zeitgeist

时代精神（德语外来语）

Woe and misery

悲伤和痛苦

On the edge of living or

death

在生死存亡的边缘

Be psychologically prepared

for...

对…心理又准备

Put….on the table

把…提上议题

高分句型 Did you sense the speed of melting iceberg in the

North Pole? Did you see the tears of the children in

Indonesian Tsunami? Did you feel the uprising

temperature around your feet?

不按常理出牌，开头三排比问句，以广告式的呼吁一下子就

聚焦了考官的注意力，提出的三个点都是极其典型的环境问

题，之间把文章定位到了 7 分以上！

When the Indonesian Tsunami occurred, nobody was

psychologically prepared for the upcoming disaster

which eventually wiped out the entire shore and even

the whole city.

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例子的描述短小精悍，采用 WHICH 引导的宾语从句，配合

小词 wipe out 的使用，让整个例子变得很形象生动

But were there more precautions taken world-widely,

perhaps, there won’t be any woe and misery

prevailing on earth.

逗号和虚拟语气的组合，加上 woe and misery 这类文学用

词的熟练使用，考官看到这里基本上已经定义为 8 分以上作

文了

If only any of those international communities tried a

bit harder to propaganda a better place for living by

encouraging and guiding the people and countries,

many of the natural disasters wouldn’t happen.

IF ONLY 引导的虚拟语气，注意都是过去式

Task2：It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the other culture.

We can learn as much as from books, films and internet. to what extent do you

agree or disagree?

Over the years, with the development of modern mass media, some people reckon

that it’s no longer necessary to travel to others places. Merely a few mouse clicks

and film scenarios, the world is presented in front of us. However, I am still firmly

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convinced that the best access to learning a distinct culture is to pay the place a real

visit.

中规中矩的开头，提出大背景，有些人认为，自己观点，逻辑清晰

There is no denying that the modern media pattern has changed our lives to a great

extent by optimizing our modes of learning the whole world, but it’s not mighty

enough to cover every single corner of an exotic realm. For example, you never know

how drunk and crazy the Germen people will become until you have been to the

October Fest in Munich. The feeling and experience you acquired from the real places

is visual and genuine, which will definitely give you a precious memory.

提出现代媒介的局限性，反之，就突出了实地旅游的优点

Moreover, compared to the world in the past, we are the lucky generation. After the

long course of cultural fusion and development of modern transportation, the world

we lived in now is already a melting pot. That is to say, you are free and welcomed to a

foreign country any time.

与过去相比，现代各个国家之间的壁垒几乎没有，现代人可以自由穿行

Finally, compared to staying at home browsing some virtual material no matter it is

audio, video or paper version, it’s more open-minded and optimistic to pay that

place a visit. During the trip you can improve your inter-personal skills with people

with different cultural backgrounds.

与足不出户相比，实地考察更能锻炼人

To summary, even though the book, films and internet enable us to know a different

culture in some aspects, the traditional way like traveling should be never forsaken

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and still remains the first priority of a cultural glimpse.

总结，提出实地旅行的地位无法撼动

词汇句型

与话题相关的词

汇、词组

Modern mass media

现代大众传播媒介

Mouse click

鼠标敲击

Film scenario

电影情节

Distinct culture

不同的文化

October Fest

慕尼黑啤酒节

Browse

浏览

Cultural fusion

文化融合

Modern transportation

现代交通工具

Melting pot

大熔炉

高分词汇、词组 Be firmly convinced

that…

确信是…

The access to doing….

做…的途径

Exotic realm

异国领域

Cultural glimpse

文化体验

Inter-personal skill

人际关系

Be forsaken

被摒弃

Remain the first priority of…

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Genuine

真正的

仍然是第一位

高分句型 Merely a few mouse clicks and film scenarios, the

world is presented in front of us.

Merely 的意思接近 just，但是语气更强烈，同样可以领导

一句句子。

There is no denying that the modern media pattern

has changed our lives to a great extent by optimizing

our modes of learning the whole world, but it’s not

mighty enough to cover every single corner of an

exotic realm.

不可否认的是…但是不代表…这样的句式一出现就可以很有

效的延长一句话的长度

The feeling and experience you acquired from the real

places is visual and genuine, which will definitely give

you a precious memory.

一句简单的宾语从句，但是从语义和逻辑上都很精炼

After the long course of cultural fusion and

development of modern transportation, the world we

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lived in now is already a melting pot.

After a long course of..在很长的过程后，一样是一种引导

句子的方式

Finally, compared to staying at home browsing some

virtual material no matter it is audio, video or paper

version, it’s more open-minded and optimistic to

pay that place a visit.

要注意的是 compared to+doing，这边出现两个进行时

态，前者是表名词后者表同步进行

Task 2 题目：Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is

not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With the course of globalization and cultural fusion, many minority languages are

on the verge of distinction. Some people believed it’s a good trend to follow

because since those minority folks picked up the major languages shared worldwide,

it is much easier to connect the world. However, I am still convinced that it’s

important to maintain the language diversity.

提出大背景，改写题目，提出观点，一气呵成

Language for the first place is more than a tool of communication but combined

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with the cultural essence and profound history of a country or even a region, which,

if died out, would definitely cast a shadow over the understanding of some particular

cultures. For example, how are we supposed to comprehend the ancient Welch stone

monuments without anyone that speaks the lingo?

一句长难句包含观点，一个生动的西方化例子辅助

More importantly, there’s no priority between languages. Those minority

languages survived for thousands of years represent for the very spirit and treasure

of a race or a civilization and our attitudes towards which should be respectful and

protective so that a coexistence could happen.

简单精炼的一句话开头，紧跟一句话理由加正确的态度

From linguistic perspectives, research on the minority languages and different

dialects of a country is of high importance to understand the formation of a nation

and certain races. Those lingos and dialects, to some extent, could be the major

language spoken by ancient inhabitants of such land, which served as a precious

reference for both linguists and folks to trace back to where they are and who they

are.

提升到语言学角度，点更深更考究，让人不得不信服

In conclusion, the consequence of a one-language-world will be devastating to the

great endeavor of the human cultural preservation. Instead, a multicultural melting

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pot is more welcomed if people can talking to each easily without forsaking their

own languages.

结尾正反对比点题，总字数控制在 270 以内，全文没有拖沓，言简意赅。

词汇句型

与话题相关

的词汇、词

组

Globalization

全球化

Minority language

小语种

Language diversity 语言

多样化

Distinction

灭绝

Die out

死绝/灭绝

Survive

存活

Treasure

宝藏

Linguistic 语 言

学的

高分词汇、

词组

Cultural fusion 文 化

融合

On the verge of… 在…的

边缘

Cast a shadow over..

在…投上阴影

Trace back to…

追溯到，回到…

Lingo

听不懂的话，方言

Coexistence

共存

Ancient inhabitant

古老、远古的原住民

Endeavor

努力

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Melting pot

大熔炉

Forsake

放弃，摒弃

高分句型 1. Language for the first place is more than a tool of

communication but combined with the cultural essence

and profound history of a country or even a region, which,

if died out, would definitely cast a shadow over the

understanding of some particular cultures.（宾语从句第一

弹，which+if, 拉长句子无极限）

2. Those minority languages survived for thousands of years

represent for the very spirit and treasure of a race or a

civilization and our attitudes towards which should be

respectful

and protective so that a coexistence could happen.(宾语从

句第二弹，towards+which， 使句子结构清晰)

3. Those lingos and dialects, to some extent, could be the

major language spoken by ancient inhabitants of such

land, which served as a precious reference for both

linguists and folks to

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trace back to where they are and who they are.(宾语从句第

三弹，延续长句，绵绵不断)

4. Instead, a multi-cultural melting pot is more welcomed if

people can talking to each easily without forsaking their

own

languages.(Instead 也可以引领句子，亮点词起到加分功能)