主要特点记叙为主稍加议论旁带说明

能力要求

主要问题要点不全线索不清

原因：步骤不对

书面表达

六 步 法六 步 法

抄

改连

扩

抓审书面表达

书面表达六步法

书面表达六步法一、审题

确定基本要素 :5W1H何 时 何 地 何 人 为何 如 何 做 了 何 事

书面表达六步法二、抓要点

确定主要行为What happened?

书面表达六步法三、扩展成句

形成基本语义单位Who did what?

书面表达六步法

四、连句成文

时间 空间 细节连贯 呼应

书面表达六步法五、查错改错

要尽量剔除错误

书面表达六步法

六、誊写

卷面不工整扣 5分

课堂练习

请用六步法写一篇短文

五个 “ W” 一个 “ H”

第一步 审题认真读题然后找出

把答案写在题中相应的位置

书面表达经典示例书面表达经典示例 假设你是李华，在美国探亲。假设你是李华，在美国探亲。 20002000 年年 22 月月 88 日日

清晨，你目击了一起交通事故。警察局让你写一清晨，你目击了一起交通事故。警察局让你写一份材料，报告当时所见情况。根据下列图画写出份材料，报告当时所见情况。根据下列图画写出报告。报告。　　 11 、目击者应该准确报告事实；、目击者应该准确报告事实； 22 、词数、词数 100100 左右；左右； 33 、结尾已为你写好。、结尾已为你写好。

_________________________________________ 　　 About two minutes later I stopped a passAbout two minutes later I stopped a passing car and took the old man to the nearest hospital.ing car and took the old man to the nearest hospital.

Li HuaLi Hua

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At 7:15 on the morning of February 8, 2000, I saw a woman driving a car hit the man in the street.

第二步 抓要点一幅图，一要点一幅图，一要点

时态直达 语态到位介 / 副词紧随

抓要点，配动词抓要点，配动词

第三步 扩展成句

把要点变成完整的句子。注意使用介 / 副词

第四步 连句成文

增加细节 呼应首尾句与句相连词与词搭配

第五步 查错改错主谓一致吗？ 时态正确吗？时态正确吗？有“半截话”吗？

第六步 誊写

卷面整洁不一定加分，卷面潦草一定要扣分！

作业选评

要改进吗？为什么？

①①At 7:15 a.m.At 7:15 a.m. on the morning on the morning

ofof Feb. 8th, 2000 Feb. 8th, 2000, I , I was was

headingheading east east on the south side on the south side

ofof the Park Road, the Park Road, takingtaking my my

morning walk morning walk as usualas usual.. ②I saw an old man on the other side of the road outside the gate of the City Park.

③He was just crossing the street when a car on the 3rd Street made a sudden right turn at the crossing.

④The car was so fast that the old man even didn’t have time to dodge and the car hit the elderly hard.

⑤⑤I I thoughtthought the driver the driver

would have stopped to would have stopped to

helphelp, , butbut she she didn'tdidn't. .

⑥⑥InsteadInstead,, she she justjust drove drove

offoff, , leavingleaving the old man the old man

still still lyinglying on the groundon the ground

in painin pain..

⑦⑦FortunatelyFortunately,, II noted downnoted down

the detailsthe details:: itit waswas a yellow a yellow

car,car, the plate number the plate number ofof

whichwhich waswas AC864AC864,, andand the the

driverdriver waswas a young ladya young lady..

⑧⑧AfterAfter that that, , II went over towent over to

check outcheck out the old man.the old man.

About two minutes laterAbout two minutes later I I stoppedstopped a passing car a passing car andand tooktook the old man to the ne the old man to the nearest hospital.arest hospital.

Li HuaLi Hua

年轻妇女

颜色：黄

AC864

小结审题，抓点造句，成文改错，誉写

作业 复习本课要点 背诵精彩范文